Not as good as your first song but not bad, not good; pretty decent. The bass is too high, beginning is a bit too repetitive. The other elements of the music are at odds too much.
Not as good as your first song but not bad, not good; pretty decent. The bass is too high, beginning is a bit too repetitive. The other elements of the music are at odds too much.
Yeah I know, I'm still trying to improve with the songs but mostly I just do it like it's not always the best one I have ever made you know
Better than me.
Besides the fact voice actor 1 is annoying to listen to; voice actor 2 is honestly pretty good to listen but where is the jokes? Jokes have set up, twist and punch line. This literally just sounds like American politics on Twitter with the two Russians arguing against one another.
"He is orange" and "Joe Biden is great president" ok, but where is the joke?
"He go into a coffin and wake up a zombie" ok but where is the joke, you two aren't playing off of each other.
Humor works when two people play off each other; you two aren't playing all that different of characters, in order for humor, jokes to work you need two people to be playing off of each other if you want to do this kind of humor.
Let me use an example, not a great example mind you but an example to get the point across.
Russian one: "Joe Biden has been shown to be sleeping at important meetings and the media focused on his favorite flavor of ice cream; he has failed to do any effective policy to help the average American."
Russian two: "He not orange like Trump, he's a great leader! He's been an outstanding leader for the rest of the world!"
Russian one: "Good leader? He left military weapons and vehicles overseas, what do you mean good leader?"
Russian two: "I never said he was good for America; now help me hot wire this tank."
Yeah my joke isn't funny but it's meant to get the point across; back and forth should be going between the two, the two should be playing off of each other; acting different from one another.
For the love of god; avoid the Teen Titans Go style of writing of; "look at this; we wrote two characters to be the same people with no personality differences!"
I lost brain cells reading this
Okay look I am giving my honest feedback so please don't mad at me and I know not everything is for everyone.
To me this sounds like pretentious trash I would write in my teens with the repeat of words, timing and how the poem is laid out. The ideals and the characterization are trying to be relatable with it's words with the fact of loafing around where you're trying to be taking action, this hits an emotional stride in people that makes them relate to what is being said here.
I don't really care about the timing, the verbiage and the word choice chosen. It's well made don't get me wrong, I just don't value this in any meaningful way so perhaps that's why it doesn't hit the same emotional stride in me with it's themes and poetry.
I was surprised how all poems were mostly devoted to the same theme of feeling stuck where we are and a desire for action. It was not intended, there were no behind the scenes deal or conspiracy. It probably means that this is what many people feel and want to express.
I guess if it doesn't feel relatable for you it means you aren't in this stalling state and generally feel great of everything in the world around you, which is cool and I'm really happy and even a bit envious for you.
Okay let me give some helpful feedback;
it assaults' the ears too much
It's too repetitive
There is no rhythm to it.
If you want to do something simple, then do something simple with a simple beat, timing, etc.
If you want to do something complex then it's tougher balancing act but you can't be as repetitive as you are here.
I'm bad at making music too and sure as heck this sounds like it was mashed together with little to no effort put into it.
When I was making this, I was just starting out with BeepBox so i randomly put notes around like a child lmao. That's why the rhythm is basically non existent
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Joined on 2/9/15